Friday, April 13, 2012

Unit 4 : introduction of a paragraph

The Topic Sentence
A topic sentence usually comes at the beginning of a paragraph; that is, it is usually the first sentence in a formal academic paragraph.  (Sometimes this is not true, but as you practice writing with this online lesson site, please keep to this rule unless you are instructed otherwise.)  Not only is a topic sentence the first sentence of a paragraph, but, more importantly, it is the most general sentence in a paragraph.  What does "most general" mean?  It means that there are not many details in the sentence, but that the sentence introduces an overall idea that you want to discuss later in the paragraph. 
For example, suppose that you want to write a paragraph about the natural landmarks of your hometown.   The first part of your paragraph might look like this: 
 
 
 
       My hometown is famous for several amazing natural features.  First, it is noted for the Wheaton River, which is very wide and beautiful. Also, on the other side of the town is Wheaton Hill, which is unusual because it is very steep.
(Notice how the first sentence begins with "My hometown..." a few spaces to the right of the paragraph edge.  This is an indentation.  All paragraphs in English MUST begin with an indentation.)
Note how the first sentence, My hometown, Wheaton, is famous for several amazing geographical features,is the most general statement. This sentence is different from the two sentences that follow it, since the second and third sentences mention specific details about the town's geography, and are not general statements.
Here are some examples of sentences that cannot be used as topic sentences. Can you figure out why they are inappropriate?  
 
  1. My hometown is famous because it is located by Wheaton River, which is very wide, and because it is built near an unusually steep hill called Wheaton Hill.

 
  1. There are two reasons why some people like to buy cars with automatic transmission and two reasons why others like cars with manual transmission.

 
  1. Clouds are white.
The problem with sentence #1 is that it contains too many details. Topic sentences are general, and details should appear later in the paragraph. A better topic sentence would be like the one mentioned above, My hometown is famous for several amazing geographical features.
Sentence #2 is not appropriate as a topic sentence because it mentions two topics, not just one. Paragraphs are usually about one main thing and so their topic sentences should also be about only one main thing.
The problem with sentence #3 is that it is toogeneral. It is also very boring! Would you like to read a paragraph with this topic sentence? Most people would not.
We can rewrite sentences #2 and #3 in the following ways to make it better: 
 
  • There are two reasons why some people like to buy cars with automatic transmission. 

    
OR (in a different paragraph):

  • There are two reasons why some people like cars with manual transmission.

 
  • The shapes of clouds are determined by various factors.
Supporting Sentences
Consider again the above-mentioned, short paragraph: 
 
       My hometown, Wheaton, is famous for several amazing natural features.  First, it is noted for the Wheaton River, which is very wide and beautiful. Also, on the other side of the town is Wheaton Hill, which is unusual because it is very steep.
(Again, note how this paragraph is indented on the first line, about five or seven spaces in from the left-hand edge of the paragraph. Always remember to indent your paragraphs!)
When a reader reads a topic sentence, such as My hometown, Wheaton, is famous for several amazing natural features,a question should usually appear in the reader's mind.  In this case, the question should be like, "What are the natural features that make Wheaton famous?"   The reader should then expect that the rest of the paragraph will give ananswer to this question. 
Now look at the sentences after the topic sentence.  We can see that the second sentence in the paragraph,  First, it is noted for the Wheaton River, which is very wide and beautiful,indeed gives an answer to this question. That is, the second sentence gives some explanation for the fact that Wheaton is a famous town. Similarly, we can see that the third sentence also gives some explanation for the fact that Wheaton is famous by giving another example of an "amazing natural feature," in this case, Wheaton Hill.
The second and third sentences are called supporting sentences.  They are called "supporting" because they "support," or explain, the idea expressed in the topic sentence.  Of course, paragraphs in English often have more than two supporting ideas.   The paragraph above is actually a very short paragraph.  At minimum, you should have at leastfive to seven sentences in your paragraph.  Here we can see our paragraph about Wheaton with a few more supporting sentences in bold font: 
 
 
 
       My hometown is famous for several amazing natural features.  First, it is noted for the Wheaton River, which is very wide and beautiful. Also, on the other side of the town is Wheaton Hill, which is unusual because it is very steep. The third amazing feature is the Big Old Tree. This tree stands two hundred feet tall and is probably about six hundred years old.
In this lesson, we will talk about supporting sentences again in the section, "Details in Paragraphs," below. 
 
The Concluding Sentence
In formal paragraphs you will sometimes see a sentence at the end of the paragraph which summarizes the information that has been presented.  This is the concluding sentence.  You can think of a concluding sentence as a sort of topic sentence in reverse.
You can understand concluding sentences with this example.  Consider a hamburger that you can buy at a fast-food restaurant.*  A hamburger has a top bun (a kind of bread), meat, cheese, lettuce, and other elements in the middle of the hamburger, and a bottom bun. Note how the top bun and the bottom bun are very similar.  The top bun, in a way, is like a topic sentence, and the bottom bun is like the concluding sentence.  Both buns "hold" the meat, onions, and so on.  Similarly, the topic sentence and concluding sentence "hold" the supporting sentences in the paragraph.  Let's see how a concluding sentence (in bold font) might look in our sample paragraph about Wheaton: 
 
       My hometown is famous for several amazing natural features.  First, it is noted for the Wheaton River, which is very wide and beautiful. Also, on the other side of the town is Wheaton Hill, which is unusual because it is very steep. The third amazing feature is the Big Old Tree. This tree stands two hundred feet tall and is probably about six hundred years old. These three landmarks are truly amazing and make my hometown a famous place.
Notice how the concluding sentence, These three landmarks are truly amazing and make my hometown a famous place,summarizes the information in the paragraph.  Notice also how the concluding sentence is similar to, but not exactly the same as, the topic sentence. 
Not all academic paragraphs contain concluding sentences, especially if the paragraph is very short.  However, if your paragraph is very long, it is a good idea to use a concluding sentence. 
 
Details in Paragraphs
The short paragraph in this lesson is a fairly complete paragraph, but it lacks details.  Whenever possible, you should include enough details in your paragraphs to help your reader understand exactly what you are writing about.  In the paragraph about Wheaton, three natural landmarks are mentioned, but we do not know very much about them.  For example, we could add a sentence or two about Wheaton river concerning HOW wide it is or WHY it is beautiful.  Consider this revision (and note the additional details inbold): 
 
 
 
       My hometown is famous for several amazing natural features.  First, it is noted for the Wheaton River, which is very wide and beautiful. On either side of this river, which is 175 feet wide, are many willow trees which have long branches that can move gracefully in the wind.  In autumn the leaves of these trees fall and cover the riverbanks like golden snow.  Also, on the other side of the town is Wheaton Hill, which is unusual because it is very steep.  Even though it is steep, climbing this hill is not dangerous, because there are some firm rocks along the sides that can be used as stairs.  There are no trees around this hill, so it stands clearly against the sky and can be seen from many miles away.  The third amazing feature is the Big Old Tree. This tree stands two hundred feet tall and is probably about six hundred years old.  These three landmarks are truly amazing and make my hometown a famous place.

Unit 5 : Writing a paragraph- 1

Topic
Water Pollution
Topic Sentence
Water pollution is the contamination of bodies of water. the cause water pollution such as dumping garbage and oil car, spraying chemicals and fertilizers, and animal wastes.  
Supporting sentences
The first causes are dumping garbage and oil car. Dumping garbage in bodies of waters. Rain washes off the oil that cars drop on the roads. This runs into gutters and then into waterways.

Second cause is spraying chemicals and fertilizers that can seep through soil and get into waters.

Then, animal wastes sometimes leak from tanks and go to streams and rivers. for examples animal stool.
Concluding sentences
The conclusion is the cause water pollution such as dumping garbage and oil car, spraying chemicals and fertilizers, and animal wastes. 




Paragraph:

Water pollution is the contamination of bodies of waterThe first causes are dumping garbage and oil car. Dumping garbage in bodies of waters. Rain washes off the oil that cars drop on the roads. This runs into gutters and then into waterways. Second cause is spraying chemicals and fertilizers that can seep through soil and get into watersThen, animal wastes sometimes leak from tanks and go to streams and rivers. for examples animal stool. The conclusion is the cause water pollution such as dumping garbage and oil car, spraying chemicals and fertilizers, and animal wastes. 

Monday, March 5, 2012

Unit 3:Writing Process


What is a paragraph?

It is a group of sentences that introduces, presents and develops one main idea aboutthe topic. And it can be divided into three major parts.

A.    The Topic Sentence

·         It is normally the first sentence of the paragraph.
·         It conveys the overall point of the paragraph.
·         It helps the writer focus on the idea written about.
·         It helps the reader know about what the paragraph is all about.

B.     The Supporting Details

·         They are sentences used to support the main idea stated in the topic sentence.
·         They give more information about the main idea through examples.
·         They say in details what the topic sentence says in general.
·         They should be clear evidence that what the topic sentence says is trustworthy.
·         They should be strong convincing points on which the topic sentence can rely upon.

C.    The Concluding Sentence

·         It is a reflection of the main idea pronounced in the topic sentence.
·         It sums up what the topic sentence and the supporting details talk about.
·         It is the closing sentence that reminds the readers of what they have to value.
·         It is compulsory for the completion of the paragraph unity.
·         It eventually indicates the end of a paragraph.
·         It prepares the reader for a smooth transition to the next paragraph if there is one.


Friday, February 24, 2012

Unit 2: Sentence structure

Sentence structure

Simple sentence
Joell and Jonold play badminton.
Joell and Jonold play badminton and football game.

Compound sentence
Joell plays badminton and Jonold plays football game.
Cylen is beautiful; however, she is poor.

Complex sentence
Cylen is popular even though she is poor.
Jonold didn’t go to football games because it was cancelled.

Compound – Complex Sentence
Cylen is popular because she is beautiful; however she is poor.
Cylen didn’t go to school today because she is sick and she needs rest.



Monday, February 13, 2012

Unit 1: Pre-writing

What is love to you?

What is love ?From my view it was hard to explain but i'm trying to explain about love. Love is a feeling which is wonderful toward our loved one. There are different kinds of feeling or levels of love that it doesn't appear to be the same emotion at all, but it is. There is so much to love, that it will be hard to put into this simple essay. It can tear people apart and make us do irrational things to bringing together entire nations. What can this emotion not do? It's hard to tell, but there is a lot it can.

This emotion,it bring tears to our eyes when something happens to our family members, friends, and pets. When we feel love ripped from us, as in death or being spurned by another, we do things we wouldn't normally do, such as go on violent rampages, or mourn to the extent that our loved ones have to watch us constantly to make sure we don't try anything like suicide. Some can move on, always remembering the lost loved one after a while, but others can not let go. These are the ones that need our love and support the most.

There are so many levels to love, that I can only express a few of them here. These are the ones we see most in life. Friendship starts this list off. Yes, it doesn't seem like it, but we do feel love towards our friends, this is what helps us get along so well with them, and why we miss them when we don't see our friends for a long time. It's also why we hold certain friends over others no matter what happens. Sometimes, the bond between friends deepens to the point where a stronger bond of love is made, making them family.

Another level of love, are for our siblings and other family members. Even though we do things to our family members, and sometimes we don't like some of our family, that bond is still there. It's this family bond level of love that brought about the phrase, blood is thicker than water. We will do things for our brothers, sisters, mothers, fathers, and children before we would even consider doing them for anyone else.


The last level of love, is for our special one. The feeling is so strong, it make us feel safe and protected when they were on our side. Love can give us happiness with our special one. Love also make us feel loyal, honest and sincere  to someone we really care.

It was hard to explain, but we can only feel what the meaning is, and expressed it with way that we only can understand towards another.

Friday, March 11, 2011

CHRIS MEDINA - WHAT ARE WORDS

Anywhere you are, I am near
Anywhere you go, I’ll be there
Anytime you whisper my name, you’ll see
How every single promise I keep
Cuz what kind of guy would I be
If I was to leave when you need me most

What are words
If you really don’t mean them
When you say them
What are words
If they’re only for good times
Then they don’t
When it’s love
Yeah, you say them out loud
Those words, They never go away
They live on, even when we’re gone

And I know an angel was sent just for me
And I know I’m meant to be where I am
And I’m gonna be
Standing right beside her tonight

And I’m gonna be by your side
I would never leave when she needs me most

What are words
If you really don’t mean them
When you say them
What are words
If they’re only for good times
Then they don’t
When it’s love
Yeah, you say them out loud
Those words, They never go away
They live on, even when we’re gone

Anywhere you are, I am near
Anywhere you go, I’ll be there
And I’m gonna be here forever more
Every single promise I keep
Cuz what kind of guy would I be
If I was to leave when you need me most

I’m forever keeping my angel close